Burgundy Wool
Por favor, mi crítica (corto) la apertura de la historia?
Está tomado de "El prevaricadores", mi joven-adulto drama / comedia de humor negro / romance / novela de suspense. ********** UNO: LA [cursiva] ACTUAL La tela de su piel era tan suave, tan pura y brillante en la luz del sol. Me rozó la cabellera color vino de su rostro seráfico con los dedos vestido de lana. Su los ojos muy abiertos y el azul y triste. Situada en el lago de color carmesí, que era hermosa. -Elle [la cursiva final] La sacudida fuerte Elle arrancó de sus pensamientos. Volver a la realidad. ********** I literalmente empezado a escribir esto, pero he estado planeando por un tiempo. Esto es todo lo que tengo hasta ahora. La historia se escribe todos los más completamente en tercera persona, sino que cada capítulo comienza con un breve monólogo en primera persona desde el Punto de vista de uno de los personajes principales [en cursiva]. En este caso, el personaje es Elle. Comentarios, sugerencias, etc son bienvenidas. Ser tan dura como te gusta, lo puedo tomar.
así, por escrito ur es muy florido .. Quiero decir, literalmente, sólo u nos dio un par de frases. pero hasta el momento, sus flores muy … que es una buena cosa. va en contra de la escritura de Hemingway de ……( minimalismo dando como pequeño detalle como sea posible).
Epic by Designs Wool Blend Hipster Coat with Wooden Butt…
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NEW Mens ALPACA Wool Peru Knit Crewneck NWT Sweater~SIZE SZ L LARGE~Burgundy $28.99 |
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THEORY “Manning” Wool Coat Medium Double Breasted Buttons Burgundy Beet Elegant $259.99 |
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Heirloom Colorado 8 Ply #163 Verigated Burgundy Wool $7.08 |
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NEW Fine Womens ALPACA Wool Woolen Cardigan Sweater Peru Coat~SZ L~Burgundy $32.99 |
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New Fine Alpaca Knitting Yarn Wool 10 Skeins Balls~DARK WINE BURGUNDY $38.99 |
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GAP Maroon Burgundy Acrylic Wool Embroidered Floral Hat Beanie M / L $3.99 |
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Mens MERONA Wool V-Neck Sweater size MEDIUM burgundy argyle $29.25 |
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Ladies Cashmere/Wool Dress Gloves – ( Ruby/Red – Burgundy ) – Size 7.5 – NEW $15.62 |
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Eileen Fisher Burgundy Wool Turtleneck Sweater Small $19.99 |
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HANDMADE PURE WOOL BURGUNDY CREAM EAR COVER BEANIE MEDIUM TO LARGE $13.18 |
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Vintage KETY Heathered Burgundy WOOL Rustic SWEATER Zip Front MOCK Neck Mens L $24.99 |
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Women’s Burgundy Wool MIMCO Scarf New with Tags $26.38 |
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KATAYONE ADELI Burgundy Striped Wool Flare Leg Pants Slacks Trousers Sz 9 $29.00 |
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MENS WOOL WINTER IVY CAP FULL LINED MAROON BURGUNDY M/L $12.30 |
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NEW HELL BUNNY BURGUNDY RED KNEE LENGTH WOOL LINED CORSET COURTNEY COAT 8-16 $148.96 |
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NEW HELL BUNNY BURGUNDY RED KNEE LENGTH WOOL LINED CORSET COURTNEY COAT 8-16 $148.96 |
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NEW HELL BUNNY BURGUNDY RED KNEE LENGTH WOOL LINED CORSET COURTNEY COAT 8-16 $148.96 |
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Very Soft Light Burgundy “Charisma” Yarn 80% Wool250% Acrylic 500gr 1100yds $20.00 |
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Burgundy Navy Blue Fleece Lined Recycled Wool Sweater Mittens New w Tags $28.95 |
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Burgundy Navy Blue Fleece Lined Recycled Wool Sweater Mittens New w Tags $28.95 |
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4 MENS HALF HOSE LONG RIB VIRGIN WOOL SOCK BURGUNDY $10.96 |
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BOILED WOOL ~ BURGUNDY Women Austria Fitted Short Dress Suit Coat JACKET 6 8 S $149.00 |
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Women’s Wool Suit Gray burgundy gray blazer $12.99 |
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Men’s Luxury Designer 100% Wool Burgundy V-Neck Sweater MSRP $125 NWT OMG – XL $22.50 |
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GAP 80% Merino Wool Blend Black Blue Gray Burgundy Stripe 1/2 Zip Sweater EUC XL $6.99 |
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MENS LAMBS WOOL Argyle M Charcoal Gray/Burgundy John Ashford Sweater $6.50 SHIP $32.99 |
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New Blend Alpaca Knitting Yarn Wool 10 Skeins Balls~ BURGUNDY 843 $21.99 |
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CANVAS TURNOUT HORSE DUCK WINTER BLANKET WOOL LINING BURGUNDY 74″ $49.99 |
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Ties Unlimited Wool Gray Burgundy Stripe Neck Tie $1.99 |
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Paisley, Wool, Jamavar Scarf or Shawl. Burgundy & Black Jamawar Wrap $34.99 |
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Burgundy cardigan sweater Alpaca blend XL Dark red Isda Open front Wine Wool $37.95 |
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Merrell brown wool and burgundy suede mule clogs womens size 8.5 M $24.99 |
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Regent Clothes Womens Wool Suit Blazer Jacket 12 Burgundy Button Front Excellent $19.95 |
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Woolrich Burgundy Red Wool Cardigan Sweater NWT size Large $9.99 |
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12×18 WOOL AREA RUG PAK PERSIAN HANDMADE BURGUNDY IVORY $9,800.00 |
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Hand-tufted Regal Black/ Burgundy Wool Rug (8′ x 11′) $385.04 Order the Regal Black/Burgundy wool rug today and save with O.co! |
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Hand-tufted Elegance Burgundy Wool Rug (8′ Star) $199.31 Enhance your home or office decor with the Elegance Burgundy rugStar-shaped rug has an elegant traditional design that will complement any roomArea rug is hand-tufted in India of a 100-percent New Zealand wool pile |
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Hand-tufted Camelot Burgundy Wool Rug (10′ x 14′) $549.09 Intricate Oriental detailing highlights this hand-tufted Camelot wool rug. This area rug features shades of burgundy, terracotta, beige, gold, olive, brown and cream. |
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Handmade Flora Burgundy Wool Rug (4′ Round) $68.57 This rug derives its sheen from an ancient pot dying technique Traditional rug is hand-tufted from 100-percent, hand-spun wool Area rug displays rich shades of gold, red, burgundy and green |
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Ferrecci Men’s Burgundy Wool Fedora Hat $39.99 This stylish fedora hat from Ferrecci features a multicolored feather design and contrasting ribbon detail. A wool construction with a satin lining completes this fashionable hat. |
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Handmade Flora Burgundy Wool Rug (8′ Round) $294.94 This rug derives its sheen from an ancient pot-dying technique Traditional rug is hand-tufted from 100-percent hand-spun wool Area rug displays rich shades of gold, red, burgundy and green |
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Ferrecci Men’s Burgundy Wool Godfather Hat $39.99 This stylish God Father hat from Ferrecci features 100-percent wool felt construction with a 2-inch brim, multi color feather design and contrasting grosgrain ribbon complete this bold hat. |
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Hand-loomed Striped Burgundy Wool Rug (8′ X 11′) $374.84 This striped rug is hand-loomed with 100-percent wool. The looped texture is accentuated with red, gold, sage and orange hues. |
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Handmade Heritage Kerman Burgundy Wool Rug (3′ x 5′) $56.13 Accent your home decor with this Heritage Kerman rug Hand-tufted rug features a traditional Persian design Wool rug features a multi-color background with a burgundy border |
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Handmade Heritage Kerman Burgundy Wool Rug (6′ Square) $143.98 Add a splash of color to any room with a Kerman rug Traditional rug is hand-tufted of 100-percent wool Rug is features a multi-color background with a burgundy border |